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my grandmother's tartan bag sits on an upside-down bucket in the basement,
full to the brim with little liquor bottles and cardboard boxes

I go to do the laundry,
pass it twice an hour

and every time, just for a moment, I think she's visiting
all saints
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not grief, but something like it is by ~consolecadet "is grounded in a profoundly personal loss, yet speaks to a universal emotion" (suggester's words). ( Suggested by beeinthebottle and Featured by neurotype )
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Braxton-T-Rutledge Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013
This is extremely solid.

Try reading it with a period after 'hour'

last line "every time I think she's visiting"

I'd almost suggest breaking that to read

"every time I think
she's visiting".

You say a lot without many wasted words, provide enough details to be easily relate-able. 
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The brevity is what makes this feel so pure. It's just enough without being over-said. Well done. :heart:
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consolecadet Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
Thank you.
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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KaitForest Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013   Writer
i really love this. damn me for not checking my messages, this is gold.
well deserved. :heart:
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consolecadet Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013
Thank you! I'm glad you like it. <3
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Tessriane Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
<3 <3 <3 <3 <3
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consolecadet Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013
?
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Tessriane Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I couldn't think of anything else to say. I favorited this, and I love it. I just couldn't think of anything to say.
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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